In need of a beta!

[snaples]

 I have this story.  And it's going places.  Well ... I hope it is.  But I need some direction and honest no-holds-barrel crit.  It's not complete (I realise some betas prefer to view and crit a finished story).  It's just so lacking right now because my writing skills are somewhat rusty and I'm afraid of abandonning it because my writing isn't giving justice to the story.  I tend to be describing and not feeling.

Anyone?  The story is HPatDH!Snarry and concerns vampires. :D